Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to successful career, while others believe that it is the better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views.

Nowadays, many

students

concerned

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about their

career

paths. Whether it is school

graduates

or

university

graduates

. Both of them provide particular benefits.

Schools

graduates

can start the

jobs

at early ages,

meanwhile

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university

graduates

can gain better education for better

jobs

available. In

this

essay,

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am going to explain both views.

First

of all, studying at college can give

students

broader

knowledges

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knowledge

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or specific educations. It will benefit them if they

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area

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are

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going to take academic

career

paths,

such

as doctors, lawyers, engineers, or Scientists. Studying laws will earn

students

a degree of law

that is

required to work at

lawyer

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firms.

University

students

have a chance to

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their

businesses

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business

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or

experts

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connection

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.

For

example

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is Mark

Zuckernberg

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Zuckerberg

,

he

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graduates

from Harvard

university

mastering

at

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Technology. later, together with his friends, he develops the biggest social media

platforms

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called Facebook and rise his networth to 150

billions

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dollar. On the other

hands

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,

a

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apply

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students

who choose to

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after graduating from

schools

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school

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, usually have different reasons for taking

the

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jobs

at early

ages

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age

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. There is a chance that they

comes

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from a poor family and they have to support their family finances.

Moreover

, getting

the

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jobs

at early

ages

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will improve their experiences and maturity. It will help them to overcome any obstacles on building their

sucesful

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successful

career

. The best example is Jack Ma, the founder of

retails

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and

wholesales

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company called Alibaba that

graduates

from high

schools

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school

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and start the

businees

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business

right after

graduations

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graduation

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. In conclusion, both

of

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views provide

differents

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different

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advantages

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on the working environment they are willing to take. Taking the

jobs

straight after the

schools

can boost their

mentallity

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mentality

and maturity to solves the difficulties in building

career

paths. Meanwhile, going to colleges can elevate the

students

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student's

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knowledges

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knowledge

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and

educations

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education

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for the purpose of working on specific

jobs

.