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Band 6

You recently moved to a new neighbourhood, and you are facing difficulties with the public transportation system. Write a letter to your local council to express your concerns. In your letter • explain the issues you are experiencing with public transportation • describe how these problems are affecting your daily life • suggest possible improvements to the transportation system You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the local transportation facilities in my
neigbourhood
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neighbourhood
.
To begin
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 with, I have recently moved to my current neighbourhood
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that
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which
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 is located at 27 Thomas Street, about six weeks ago, and I have witnessed a wide range of problems related to the
cleaniness
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cleanliness
 of the buses.
In addition
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, to the small number of vehicles that should be in service
incontrast
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in contrast
 to my previous area.
Due to
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 the regular rain showers, whenever I happen to reach for a bus within the area my clothes and shoes are often soaked in mud.
Furthermore
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, seats are often dirty and unattended.
Moreover
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,
due to
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 the small number of buses, I tend to be late for work as it is always crowded with people, and need to wait for longer for the next
inorder
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in order
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 to commute.
Therefore
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, I would like to suggest some plausible solutions. Like assigning more local vehicles to overcome the overcrowding issue,
renovating
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and renovating
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 the buses so that they are practical and resistant to
drit
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dirt
. Performing regular check-ups on vehicles to ensure they running efficiently and kept clean would certainly make a difference. I hope you consider my recommendations favourably and look forward to your prompt action. Yours faithfully, Waffa Ansara

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task achievement
Consider expanding on your experiences to provide more depth about how the transportation issues specifically impact your daily routine.
coherence and cohesion
Work on linking sentences and ideas more smoothly to enhance the overall flow of your letter.
task achievement
The letter has a clear purpose and requests specific improvements, demonstrating good task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
There is a polite tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for the context.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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