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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. with increased use of computers, the internet and smart phones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advanatages of this developmen?

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Technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds in many fields, especially in
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 culture.
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, today's mankind
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 started to
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 with computers, the internet and
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smart phones
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 trend has benefits and drawbacks of that improvement and that essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. There are numerous benefits to that breakthrough. One of the main advantages is that congestion might be reduced due to mankind
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, air pollution can be diminished too.
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, in the pandemic situation by the coronavirus, humankind has worked at their homes while air pollution and traffic were reduced significantly across the world. Another main advantage is that commuting
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 might be diminished, so people have to spend a quality of
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 with their family who
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 working persons,
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 they spend most of
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 at office or workplace. These are the merits of that breakthrough of
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 culture. There are some drawbacks to
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work
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. One of the major disadvantages is that
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disturbance
 of family things, children would be disturbed to their parents
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 meanwhile working,
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, concentration might be
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disturbed
 and boredom will be increased. Another main disadvantage is
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increasing the
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 when they do
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 from
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 because the employer does not follow the proper and standard
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 like actual working schedule
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 of whenever they have to need any details or information about
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work related
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. If a person works in
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, he will be worked extra hours rather than
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the actual
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 standard
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, a recent report by the Times of India said that more than 60% of the Indians have suffered for extra working hours even mid-night
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. These are the demerits of that breakthrough. To conclude, when all things considered, these both have advantages and disadvantages, reducing pollution and traffic and increasing
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 with family is the benefits. Reducing concentrations and increasing
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 hours is the disadvantages.
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