Some people think that government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployed and homeless people. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is irrefutable that each
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has
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own
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method to grasp information. Some
peoble
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people
think that
children
should be driven by their parents in joining the
group
pursuits in their leisure time while others believe that it is dispensable for young people to study by themselves. I strongly agree with the former view and the reason to support my opinion and both views of
this
topic will be discussed in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, it is no exaggeration to say that learning by facing with own experience will allow
children
to gain humungous of understandings and unforgettable memories.
Children
will see their implications clearly.
Consequently
, there will be less
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errors
in their prosperities.
Furthermore
, some
children
are more likely to comfort in learning by
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themselves
theirselves
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.
For instance
, Anna, my younger sister, love to study in her room privately rather than having a
group
discussion with her friends. She told me that
this
method maximizes most of her efficiencies in grasping the lessons.
On the other hand
, having extracurricular activities will bring a wide range of advantages to
children
.
This
is one of
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ways to build
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which will help in leading young people to become
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strong
candidate
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in applying for jobs or
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in
the
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college in the future. Joining these
group
sessions,
moreover
, will undoubtedly provide
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plenty of practical
skills
such
as interpersonal
skills
, communicating
skills
and so on.
Also
,
children
can expand their networking and have
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useful connection since they will meet
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people from all walks of
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life
lives
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. In conclusion, it depends on
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person to decide on what is the foremost method for themselves.
However
, I re-affirm that joining
group
activities will provide much more benefits for
children
such
as practical
skills
and expanding their social circles. It is important for parents to encourage the best thing for their
children
.
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