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a few people clinch that the newspapers are the most beneficial source for learning and getting information; however, opponents think that internet is a better media. discuss both views

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Information
 will benefit
people
 who need it the most. Some
people
 seek it in
newspapers
 at local stores or stations, the others find it easier getting it from the
Internet
.
This
 essay will explain both views.
First
 of all,
Information
 available in
newspapers
 usually consist of Jobs offers, Daily headlines, Stocks markets and some crime
news
.
Secondly
, For some
people
,
newspapers
 are preferable because it is easier to get and easier to read. All they need are
take
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to take
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 it from stations, open it and read it. Another reason is, Informations in
newspapers
 usually valid and hoax-free.
For example
, New York Times mention the recent political issues in their latest edition, most
people
 tend to believe that
information
 because it is impossible to change the words that are already written on the papers.
As a result
, even in the era of
digitalizations
Correct your spelling
digitalization
,
newspapers
 still running their business.
However
,
internet
media
 provide large scales of
information
.
Firstly
, The readers can get various types of
news
, from top-level
media
 with reputable integrity to non-valid and hoax
news
.
Secondly
, the spreading of the
news
 on the
internet
 is definitely faster than print
media
.
For example
, online
media
 writes
an actual
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actual information
a piece of actual information
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information
 related to a tsunami disaster that occurs on Borneo island. Within minutes, nearly all Indonesian citizens read about it and understand what is really going on. The result is, donations coming from Indonesian citizens coming into the disaster location. In conclusion, Both
media
 have their own unique benefits. Even though the newspaper is reliable but
Internet
media
 is faster than print
media
. To make it efficient, citizens should choose the correct
media
 based on their needs.
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