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Some people think that studying abroad will make them successful in life.Discuss both advantages and disadvantages

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In the
last
 few years, it has been a really famous choice to go abroad after graduating high school to get a university degree,
although
 it was not really a possibility in the past or at least a majority of students preferred to study at a local university. In
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 I am going to discuss both benefits, that an experience like
this
 can have, as well as the drawbacks.
Firstly
, being able to study in other countries, would help people mature, and be more independent, in order for them to be able to meet all kinds of problems and solve them without relying upon somebody else.
Moreover
, having the opportunity to live in a different place, means having the experience of a different culture, and meeting people traditions that are completely different from what we are used to, and
this
 would give people a high opportunity to grow and learn a lot from
this
 atmosphere.
However
, there are
also
 disadvantages. Living and studying abroad can indeed help you to become more independent, but especially at the ,beginning it can be an extremely hard experience. Some students may have to deal with problems alone for the
first
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 or might suffer from culture shock, leading them to see
this
 incredible opportunity more like to disgrace.
For
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 I found it really difficult to be alone in some
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European
 countries, more difficult if you do not know English properly good and speak clearly. To conclude, getting your university degree in a foreign educational institution can help you become more independent and grow, but the drawbacks of
this
 adventure should be taken into
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 when you are taking
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 kind of important plan.
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