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People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to overcome it?

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In the modern era, people living busy lives. But many of them target to progress a balanced
life
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 between work and lives whereas some of them only attain
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. The following essay will discuss the reasons for
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 issue and some obvious solutions to overcome it.
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, a major cause is the over-attention in work
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. Admittedly, a job is an essential or basic factor in everyone's
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 but if we give more importance than family or social
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 it will adversely affect.
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, people like a businessman or other higher position employees have a lot of responsibilities and tensions, if they spend
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 only for that it will unbalance their
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. That means it will not provide happiness in their career as well as family.
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, these unwanted tensions and confusions lead them to suffer from different diseases.
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, the money they are earning resulted to spend in hospitals
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 of spending for their enjoyments and other needs. A potential solution for
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 is, maintaining
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 as equally important in all roles.
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, when spending the
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 for the employment it should be concentrate only on that and
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 after the career
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 when spending with the family or friends it should completely provide attention on that while thinking about the job and other tensions on the all-
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 of
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 it will not gives success.
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, find some
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 spend with family and friends during weekends and holidays with more entertainment and exercise.
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 to that, some sports and meditations are
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 excellent for relaxation from stress and depression. To conclude, making a balance between work and
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 only provides success in
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.
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, some people are achieving
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 by proper planning about their job and family.
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, with some pleasant mind, we can
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fulfill
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 our dreams by balancing both factors as to give prominent in each on the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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