Some people think that educated people are more valuable than people who have learned skills through experience. Do you think that educated people are the most valuable for society? What kinds of skills can people learn through experience that can benefit society?
Undoubtedly, qualified
people
are contributing more to the nation than skilled people
, who gained
knowledge through Wrong verb form
gain
experienced
. In my view, well informed society can bring Replace the word
experience
lot
of positive Change the article
a lot
impact
and results to the surroundings. There are numerous opportunities, which can converted Fix the agreement mistake
impacts
in to
Join the words
into
the
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a
worth
experience for the uneducated Pupil. Replace the word
worthwhile
This
essay will discuss the opinions regarding educated
and Replace the word
education
trained
through Wrong verb form
training
expert
. Obviously, Fix the agreement mistake
experts
knowledgeable
public Add an article
the knowledgeable
are
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is
the
vital source to grow Correct article usage
a
the
industries, businesses, Correct article usage
apply
software
technologies with their talent. Correct word choice
and software
For instance
, intelligent competitors can execute the companies
projects to the productive results and Change noun form
company's
feedbacks
. Eventually, it helps to develop Fix the agreement mistake
feedback
market
scenario and Add an article
the market
hence
overall
country's economy. Graduate trained
and certified Add a hyphen
Graduate-trained
student's
get first priority to appear Change noun form
students
the
tests Change preposition
on the
due to
criteria. However
, though there are experienced people
with sound characteristics, cannot apply to the potential jobs and opportunities because of no or poor academic record. I believe,
intellectual Remove the comma
apply
people
can create good lifestyle
, Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
can
boost financialVerb problem
apply
Planning’s
and spread Change noun form
Planning
the
motivated energy to the community. Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, it has been seen that, mostly computer technology has been contributing
by highly certified Wrong verb form
contributed
or
IT persons to Correct word choice
apply
the
beginners. Basic Correct article usage
apply
computers
skills would surely explore the job for those learners. Fields Change the noun form
computer
such
as arts, accountants, music
are Correct word choice
and music
also
the
options for the needy one, who can take the Correct article usage
apply
trainings
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training
pieces of training
for
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on
the
short term basis and implement them Correct article usage
a
in to
the earnings by various functions. I admit, Join the words
into
if
the authorities promote Correct word choice
that if
to enhance
the competency of persons based on Change the verb form
enhancing
the
professionalism, it would influence to Correct article usage
apply
reduce
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reduction
crimes
, unemployment ,Change preposition
of crimes
poverty
. Poor background families will get Correct word choice
and poverty
motivate
and inspire Change the verb form
motivated
to
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apply
the
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apply
children's
to accomplishChange noun form
children
the
dreams and goals. In conclusion, Change the word
their
more
informative generation is precious for the country, as they are the future of Correct article usage
a more
the
society. Correct article usage
apply
Similarly
, knowledge sharing must do for the adding Capabilities to the youngster's
. Change the noun form
youngsters
youngster
This
will support to
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apply
the
society to create equality in human beings.Correct article usage
apply
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