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Today more and more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the travellers?

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Due to recent
advancement
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 in our transportation industry, the advantages of being mobile
are became
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 significantly high. In
this
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 contemporary era,
people
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, not only wants to explore their own country but
also
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 the entire world. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the main reason
of
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increase
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 in
travel
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 with examples and benefits for the
tralvel
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travel
.
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, it is important to understand that, why do
people
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wants
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 to
travel
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 more? I think, due to recent developments, travelling to distant
location
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 became more affordable, available and safe. In past,
people
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 used to
travel
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 by ships and by road. Even roads were not properly constructed. Affordable air
trasport
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transport
 changed the game.
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: A lot of
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people
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 used to go to Haj by ship, it took months of time just to reach the destination. Now, it is completely changed and by plane, the entire journey only
take
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 4 hours. Development and construction of new highways
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 made
travel
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 easy.
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, I want to highlight
benefits
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the benefits
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 of
these
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travel
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. Many countries are only dependent on tourism. It is
aslo
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also
 benefiting
to
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the local population by generating new jobs. Travellers
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 enjoy and experience different cultures and food. Travellers
taker
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take
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 many good memories with them while being
on
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differnet
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different
location
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locations
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. To sum up, travelling is benefiting many
people
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 and adding
values
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value
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 to human
existance
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existence
. Only
few
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 things should be taken care
while
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of while
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 travelling and we are all set.
People
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 should not
distrurb
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disturb
 and spoil natural
habitates
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habitats
 and
also
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 think of
emission
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emissions
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 they make during
travel
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. The balance is most important in
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everything
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every thing
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, I must say finding that balance is not
to
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 much difficult.
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