Today more and more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the travellers?

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advancement

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in our transportation industry, the advantages of being mobile

are became

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significantly high. In

this

contemporary era,

people

, not only wants to explore their own country but

also

the entire world. In

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essay, I will discuss the main reason

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increase

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travel

with examples and benefits for the

tralvel

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travel

Firstly

, it is important to understand that, why do

people

wants

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travel

more? I think, due to recent developments, travelling to distant

location

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became more affordable, available and safe. In past,

people

used to

travel

by ships and by road. Even roads were not properly constructed. Affordable air

trasport

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transport

changed the game.

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: A lot of

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people

used to go to Haj by ship, it took months of time just to reach the destination. Now, it is completely changed and by plane, the entire journey only

take

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4 hours. Development and construction of new highways

also

made

travel

easy.

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, I want to highlight

benefits

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these

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travel

. Many countries are only dependent on tourism. It is

aslo

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also

benefiting

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the local population by generating new jobs. Travellers

also

enjoy and experience different cultures and food. Travellers

taker

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many good memories with them while being

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differnet

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different

location

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. To sum up, travelling is benefiting many

people

and adding

values

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to human

existance

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existence

. Only

few

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things should be taken care

while

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travelling and we are all set.

People

should not

distrurb

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disturb

and spoil natural

habitates

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habitats

and

also

think of

emission

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they make during

travel

. The balance is most important in

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everything

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every thing

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, I must say finding that balance is not

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much difficult.

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