Education is the single most important factor for a developing country. Do you agree or disagree

Some experts claim that
education
is the only vital
criteria
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for developing
countries
' success.
However
, I disagree with
this
statement given the importance of some other matters.
This
essay will explain the reasons behind my opinion. The state of freedom and democracy, primarily, is essential in order to consider a developing
country
is on the right track. Many of these
countries
may be able to offer their citizens
high quality
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education
opportunities,
such
as Iran,
however
,
education
itself is simply not enough to reach higher standards in Iranian citizens' daily lives. Even though their students may be able to achieve higher scores
in
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average, lack of freedoms often
cause
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many of these students to suffer from
authocracy
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autocracy
. Developing
countries
,
therefore
, should keep in mind that democracy and tolerance
is
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critical as
education
on their journey to
finally
become a developed
country
. Another equally important factor is having a strong economy,
in other words
, being able to balance import and export, keep the inflation rate low and employment rate up while increasing the production quality and quantity. South Korea,
for example
, have not only invested in
education
during
1980s
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' but
also
planned and started to execute a long-term financial development policy.
Consequently
, South Korea is now considered one of the most developed
countries
in terms of
education
, economy and democracy. The secret of their success,
nevertheless
, was a well-planned state policy to sustainably develop the economical conditions. In conclusion,
although
education
might be one of the most essential matters in terms of a
country
's
state
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stage
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of development, different examples around the world have shown us it is not the only matter. A developed
country
, in my opinion, is
the
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one that
able
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to offer its well-educated citizens better financial conditions and
ability
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the ability
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to raise their voice without being charged.
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