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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic: Fast food is now universal in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions on this?

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There has been a constant debate about whether the rising popularity of fast
food
 is a positive trend. In my opinion,
this
 is a negative trend as it affects people’s life quality in general. There are multiple reasons why the increasing consumption of fast
food
 is not a positive tendency.
Firstly
, fast
food
 is unhealthy and can put people’s health at risk. It is true that
according to
 several recent studies published in prestigious nutrition journals, fast
food
 is high in sugar, salt, saturated or trans fats,
as well as
 many preservatives and processed ingredients.
Thus
,
this
 increases the occurrence of diseases
such
 as type 2 diabetes and heart-related problems.
Secondly
, the consumption of fast
food
 can lead to financial problems for families. The target consumers of fast
food
 are middle- or low-income families.
However
, the price of fast
food
 has been increasing rapidly in recent years.
For instance
, the price of a two-piece chicken combo at Popeyes jumped from $6.49 to $11.39,
while
 an eight-inch club tuna from Jimmy John’s rose from $5.75 to $9.10,
according to
 FinanceBuzz. The rise in fast
food
 prices can cause a vast majority of fast
food
 brands to take advantage and raise their prices, leading to financial problems for many consumers and reducing the
overall
 quality of life. In conclusion, I believe that the widespread availability of fast
food
 is not a good trend. Even if it can provide an economic boost in some countries, it is not worth compromising the health and quality of life of people.
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
Your arguments are solid, but try to integrate one more perspective or counterargument to create a more balanced view. This will demonstrate a comprehensive understanding.
Introduction and Conclusion Present
The introduction clearly states your position and provides a straightforward overview of the discussion.
Complete Response
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