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Fast food is now universal in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions on this?

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There has been a constant debate about whether the rising popularity of fast
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 is a positive trend. In my opinion,
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 is a negative trend as it affects people’s life quality in general. There are multiple reasons why the increasing consumption of fast
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 is not a positive tendency.
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, fast
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 is unhealthy and can put people’s health at risk. It is true that
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 several recent studies published in prestigious nutrition journals, fast
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 is high in sugar, salt, saturated or trans fats,
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 many preservatives and processed ingredients.
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,
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 increases the occurrence of diseases
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 as type 2 diabetes and heart-related problems.
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, the consumption of fast
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 can lead to financial problems for families. The target consumers of fast
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 are middle- or low-income families.
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, the price of fast
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 has been increasing rapidly in recent years.
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, the price of a two-piece chicken combo at Popeyes jumped from $6.49 to $11.39,
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 an eight-inch club tuna from Jimmy John’s rose from $5.75 to $9.10,
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 FinanceBuzz. The rise in fast
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 prices can cause a vast majority of fast
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 brands to take advantage and raise their prices, leading to financial problems for many consumers and reducing the
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 quality of life. In conclusion, I believe that the widespread availability of fast
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 is not a good trend. Even if it can provide an economic boost in some countries, it is not worth compromising the health and quality of life of people.
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