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the alteration of the Districk park between 2004 and 2014.

The given diagrams illustrate the alteration of the District
park
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 between 2004 and 2014. The general overview here is that there is a noticeable transformation after the construction take place and the significant changes are seen in the addition of extra facilities. According to the diagrams.it can be seen that in 2004, an entrance was located to the northwest of the
park
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,near the entrance was a tennis court. A football ground was in the centre,while situated to the northeast was the children’s play
area
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. There was woodland on the bottom east of the site.
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, the pound was on the south and the parking lot was situated to the west, accommodating 20 cars. By 2014, the football ground remains unchanged within
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area
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.
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, the size of the tennis courts is bigger similar to the children’s play
area
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 which there was a child soft play
area
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 adjacent to
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area
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. A toilet is between the kid’s zone and the woodland. The woodland a new, small cafe is located on the woodland.
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, the pond is relocated closer to the woodland,and it can boating now.
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 to it is a picnic zone.
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, the car
park
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 is located in the same
area
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 but its size is bigger to accommodate 50 cars. A cycling path is constructed surrounding the
park
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.

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