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Today, TV channels broadcast men’s sports shows more than women’s sport shows. Why is this the case? Should TV channels give equal showtime for each?

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Sport
 is a common subject that draw people together, it is embraced within many cultures.
However
,
sport
 that we see on TV are often showing more men’s games than women’s.
This
 is because, there are more male counterpart in the
sport
 industry than there are female. I believe womenwomen could be given more screentime to promote balance in the industry. Through out history
sport
 has been dominated by men because there are simply more men players in most sports,
hence
 why we see more matches beween them. They are present in every sort of competitions, even in femenine sports like: ballet, gynastic and ice skating. On the otherhand, we often don’t see as many women in sports
such
 as: kickboxing, soccers, or mountain climbing.
Furthermore
, in my family, I usually see my dad and brother more excited for
sport
 than me and my mom. It would deffenitely interesting to see more female in the
sport
 scene. The TV channels can broadcast more matches between women
in addition
 to their male counterpart’s matches.
This
 increase in airtime for female to represent
sport
 along with male could have a meaningful message to the viewers and encourage more girls and ladies to join
sport
 acitivities. Despite
sport
 are seen to be more associated with male because they outnumber their counterpart. I believe by giving female players equal screentime, we could make
sport
 more popular among female audience and create a more balance pool of players base on gender.
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