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Some experts say for road safety cyclists should pass a test before being allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the given bar chart
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 information about the proportion of
people
 who lived in their own houses and the
people
 who lived in rental apartments in two cities, namely England and Wales from 1918 to 2001. Overall, the trends show that by 2011 there
were
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considerable
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 drop in the percentage of households who had rented
accommodations
;
However
 the issue of
people
 who owned
places
 to live rose to almost three times as compared to 2019 eighteen. In 1918, around 80%
people
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 in views and England lived in rental
accommodations
, nearly 20% had their own
places
.
However
,
this
 trend changed afterwards; In 1939, the ratio of households who lived in rental houses cell in less than 70% and the ratio of households who own the place is rose to nearly 30% stop
furthermore
, the trend remained constant in the year 1953; there was I drop off 10% in
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 of
people
 who entered the
places
,
on the other hand
, there was 10% to rise in the number of
people
 who had their own
accommodations
. Interestingly Ono in 19 7150% of
people
were
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 living in rental
accommodations
, while the other 50% hi bill houses. Surprisingly, in the later
years
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 there was around 10% decline reported in the percentage of
people
 who lived in rental
accommodations
, where is 10% rise reported in the
people
 who lived in their place is in the data collected after every 10 years by the year 2011 the
people
 who had their own
places
 increased nearly three times as compared to 1918 and the
people
 who rented the
places
 degreased nearly two half as compared to 1918.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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