Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
During our
life
, people face numerous challenges and have to make important decisions. There are the ones who believe that it is more beneficial to live always performing the same role and executing the same activities. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
On the other hand
, there are others who prefer challenges and changes. In my way of thinking, whilst I feel that both perspectives might have positive points, I prefer to take some risks in order to improve some aspects of my life.
There are some who argue that they prefer to spend a life doing the same things. While
having the same profession, or working on
the same company for an undetermined period of time, one seldom Change preposition
in
surpass
their comfort zone. Change the verb form
surpasses
For instance
, that person knows what kind of emotion to expect from that job, and what exactly they are supposed to act. Moreover
, those also
enjoy spending their free time executing activities which
they know what type of award or pleasure will come from doing them. It can be positive for some who prefer stability Change preposition
in which
instead
of adventure. Furthermore
, they might predict what the future will look like. As far as I am concerned, that type of routine might be utterly monotonous.
Conversely
, there are others who advocate that changes are beneficial. In my perspective
challenges might lead us to improve our behaviour, as Add a comma
,perspective
also
as learn how to cope with several unexpected situations. By leaving our comfort zone, we are exposing ourselves to numerous stimuli, which might reveal our curiosity, Rephrase
well
as well as
lead us to discover new talents and vocations. To illustrate this
idea, the example of workers who frequently change their job
can be given. These switches lead them to try different areas of interest, Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
therefore
, they might find what they really enjoy doing. Additionally
, explorers who travel the world, experience
several distinct beliefs and customs, might have their creativity more stimulated and Correct word choice
and experience
also
became
open-minded.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
become
while
I feel that both views have effective arguments, I believe that changes can always be beneficial. When someone tries novel things, explores unknown places or applies for a different job, several opportunities became
available, enabling them to fulfil their potential.Wrong verb form
become
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