Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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During our
life
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, people face numerous challenges and have to make important decisions. There are the ones who believe that it is more beneficial to live always performing the same role and executing the same activities.
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, there are others who prefer challenges and changes. In my way of thinking, whilst I feel that both perspectives might have positive points, I prefer to take some risks in order to improve some aspects of my life. There are some who argue that they prefer to spend a life doing the same things.
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having the same profession, or working
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the same company for an undetermined period of time, one seldom
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their comfort zone.
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, that person knows what kind of emotion to expect from that job, and what exactly they are supposed to act.
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, those
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enjoy spending their free time executing activities
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they know what type of award or pleasure will come from doing them. It can be positive for some who prefer stability
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of adventure.
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, they might predict what the future will look like. As far as I am concerned, that type of routine might be utterly monotonous.
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, there are others who advocate that changes are beneficial. In my
perspective
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challenges might lead us to improve our behaviour, as
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as learn how to cope with several unexpected situations. By leaving our comfort zone, we are exposing ourselves to numerous stimuli, which might reveal our curiosity,
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lead us to discover new talents and vocations. To illustrate
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idea, the example of workers who frequently change their
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can be given. These switches lead them to try different areas of interest,
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, they might find what they really enjoy doing.
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, explorers who travel the world,
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several distinct beliefs and customs, might have their creativity more stimulated and
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open-minded. In conclusion,
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I feel that both views have effective arguments, I believe that changes can always be beneficial. When someone tries novel things, explores unknown places or applies for a different job, several opportunities
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available, enabling them to fulfil their potential.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • mastery
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • hesitancy
  • risk-taking
  • transitions
  • enrichment
  • equilibrium
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