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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions

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Climate change is the main danger the human race is facing in
this
 century,
also
 ocean levels are increasing at a fast pace. There are plenty of problems linked to
this
,
however
,
this
 essay will discuss the major problems, which is the flooding of residences-and probable solutions to
this
. Billions of people live in the coastal area, so even some feet of change in the level of water could be catastrophic. The rise in the temperature is one of the reasons for the melting of ice from the Himalayas and Antarctica etc. results in an increase in sea-water level causes many issues. People lose their property, assets and not to mention many become homeless. Unfortunately,
this
 reminds devastating moment that happened in Japan in
the
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2011, Tsunami, many individuals lose their families, home, and
also
 hope. Calamity like
this
 is most of the time gods act so as a human we could only ease the suffering. A possible solution to
this
 is to build
flood
 barriers.
Flood
 stoppers like dams and floodgates ought to help reduce water levels and
possibly
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 floods. These
flood
 defenders should be located
such
 that
floodwaterwater
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floodwater water
 will not reach
a
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populated areas.
Flood
 prone country, Srilanka, has built
such
 defenders,
also
 they have restricted people to build houses in the close vicinity of the water. To conclude, it is certainly true that because of global warming ocean levels are rising, but
flood
 prevention techniques would help to reduce the suffering. Many countries must adopt
flood
 prevention techniques like Srilanka to save their citizens from catastrophe.
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