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In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#books #internet #outweigh
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 rate defines the number of literate
people
 who can contribute to the development of the economy.
Knowledge
 is one of the key factors that
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 a vital role in the development of any country. There are various ways of gaining
knowledge
 either through
books
, the
internet
 or personal experiences.
This
 essay speaks partially about the importance of
knowledge
 gained from
books
 and the
knowledge
 gained from the source of the
internet
. Some
people
 believe that
knowledge
 gained from
books
 can be preserved for long years.
As a result
, many old aged
people
 desired to pass-on
books
 to their grand-
childerns
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children
. These
books
 were considered priceless because of the
knowledge
 that was passed from one generation to another.
However
, there were some drawbacks to these old fashioned
books
. They require the reader to be knowledgeable, in a way to read the book the user should know how to read a book, which became a hindrance to a few groups of society in the past because they were illiterate. Another instance, getting the accurate book was a difficult and
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 task for the reader
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in order
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inorder
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 to receive the accurate and required information. The other
factors
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factor
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 which contributed to the disadvantage of reading
books
was
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 its unavailability.
On the other hand
, few
people
 believe that in the age of computers,
the
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knowledge
 of the
internet
 is crucial. With the help of the
internet
, anyone, at any point
of
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 time, from anywhere in the world who wishes to gain
knowledge
 can access it very easily. The
Internet
 provides all sorts of information a person asks for. A recent example displays that a
12 year old
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 can become a software coder with the help of
knowledge
 gained from the
internet
. The
Internet
in
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 today's world acts as an ocean of
knowledge
, for one who deserves to know what they want to know. To conclude, during the old times,
people
 had
very
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 little source of
knowledge
, but now with the help of the
internet
people
 can excel in the desired field of study without any drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning
  • Virtual libraries
  • Cyberspace
  • Search engine literacy
  • Critical evaluation skills
  • Open-source information
  • Data mining
  • Intellectual property
  • Digital preservation
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