Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affects them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,
children
are becoming more independent
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themselves.The debated view focuses on allowing
children
to make choice in every basic
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which lead to only thinking for themselves rather than for their family
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one support others ponder that overcoming the situation which
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them.I believe
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view has
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favourable side both aspects along with my point of view are explained in the following paragraph. To embark with,there are certain reasons why
children
are making their own
decisions
.
First
and foremost,many
children
are influenced by trends and social
life
.
For example
,by seeing activities on
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social media they
also
want to become independent to make
decisions
.
Therefore
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some
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extent
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it is useful and it makes
parents
work effortless and
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without any types of worries.
Moreover
,
children
do not have any kind of
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on their
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.Eventually,they make
decisions
effectively without anyone’s help.
For instance
,50% of the
children
choose their clothes,food without
support
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of their
parents
so,it will be very helpful for their future
life
.
On the contrary
, there are two sides to a coin.
Firstly
, if
children
make
decisions
about what they are facing so it will enhance their
decision making
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skills.
Secondly
, at early
age
children
can
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skills.
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, at
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age
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they have
capabilities
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to learn, how to solve
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critical situation.
However
, by doing
this
children
can improvise their thinking power.
Lastly
, it will be very beneficial for the
situations
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.
However
, by doing
this
children
can improvise their thinking power.
Lastly
, it will be very beneficial for the
children
to learn how to tackle the situation. So that, at the
age
of 25 to 30 they will not find any difficulty to make
decisions
about their
life
. To exemplify, according to one research if
children
have enough knowledge
then
they will make
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decisions
for their
life
. In my opinion,
parents
should allow
children
to make
small
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decision
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like choosing clothes,
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decision
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of
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career
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.
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will improve
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and capability of
children
at
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early
age
. So, give them at
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age
. So, give them a chance to do
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themselves. To conclude,
this
essay has been explored from the sides with enough evidence which
finally
allows me to pen down and state that
parents
should be allowed to make
decisions
to
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their
children
and think for long term benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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