Many adults do very little exercise. Some people believe that showing sporting events like Olympics and world cup will encourage adults to exercise more. Others think there are better ways to encourage adults do exercise. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Peoples
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like big
people
doing
exercise
is good and
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Olympic is
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. All
people
do some sportings is better for
helth
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health
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peoples
strong. I want to discuss that
Olymic
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Olympic
and world cup watching very nice for
people
and do
exercise
after watching
is help
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too much for all.
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watching
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watch
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cricket
match
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going outside and
play
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playing
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in my country Punjab. Children ,
adult
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adults
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people
old
people
all watching
cricket
and after
world
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cup all going outside and
play
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playing
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to
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too
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much
cricket
.
Cricket
is good and
also
football.
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crazy
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for
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sport
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and all the time watching. Some
people
like to go
gym
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and do
there
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their
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excersie
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exercise
and make
body
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their body
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. I think both
good
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because all
peoples
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people
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making good health from
excersie
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exercise
. My feelings, I like to do
sport
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sports
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like
cricket
and I
also
like watch
criket
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cricket
world cup
match
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matches
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. Some
peoples
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people
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can do other things like go
mountaing
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mountain
walking and
this
make
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makes
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them
excersie
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exercise
more than doing
cricket
.
Also
, school teach students from start and
then
they
growing
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grow
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up and become big
people
also
good
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a good
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way to make
exceise
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exercise
excise
for adult. All type is good for
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everybody
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every body
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everybody
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. For me
watch
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watching
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cricket
and
play
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playing
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cricket
is the best
exercise
and keep me fit. So,
peoples
can
choice
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choose
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for
exercise
and do what
make
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makes
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them happy.
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