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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays, gender equality as a social cause is alarming and creating awareness among society about the existence of these issues so I somewhat disagree that colleges should give similar opportunities to both men and
women
 to get admission into different specialities and
this
 essay intends to discuss my views on the topic
further
. Lately,
women
 growth have impacted society in different good ways
for example
 to build the economy, industrialization and many more according to Indian research have both men and
women
 have contributed to different sectors like health, agriculture, politics and engineering equally. So definitely keeping gender inequality aside young
girls
 should get more time everywhere in the country to prove themselves and
this
 can be achieved by introducing more governmental schemes and increasing the seats for
women
 in educational institutions.
In addition
 to that during older ,times people perception of
women
 was to do household chores and stay at home in effect young
women
 didn't get the freedom to get basic education which is their right So to break these myths and fads equal freedom should be provided to
girls
 in various sectors which will increase their chances to get admission in their desired skill course.
For instance
, a movie named Gunjan Saxena showed a girl desire to be a pilot but due to the unavailability of seats for
girls
 in that particular position have drastically snatched the chance of Gunjan to be a pilot despite the fact that she was one of the best students for that particular skill but one day due to one government schemes she
finally
 got admission to be an air force pilot and breaking the stereotype. To conclude, Implementing sex equality and breaking stereotype for giving more chances to
women
 or
girls
 in the different sectors will definitely lead to the improvement of the country and will make
women
 confident enough to live their lives to the fullest and serve back their community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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