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NOWADAYS, MANY PEOPLE PREFER TO LIVE ALONE; IS THIS A POSITIVE OR A NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT

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The modern era of the 21st century has seen different types of living styles. Some of these patterns were highly influenced
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 the culture of
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 world
such
 as living alone. In
this
 essay, I would like to discuss whether it is good or bad to live alone. On one hand,
people
 think that living alone is fun.
Moreover
,
this
 is quite common in the younger generation, because they receive all the privacy they need. Since, elder generation
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 a tendency to provide suggestions or give a piece of advice to the young generations, which results in a feeling of being nagged in the working group of
people
.
This
 might result in feeling irritated all the time.
However
,
on the other hand
, some
people
 do believe that living all alone on your own creates a feeling of loneliness. It's human behaviour to talk with other humans particularly when they feel low or sometimes
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 when they are stressed up in
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 issues. Speaking to someone they know who cares for them, provides them
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sense of warmth that they are being cared for. It seems to be a matter of concern that if they continue to live alone for a prolonged period of time, they might suffer from depression. To sum up, living alone can be positive if the person is strong not only mentally but
also
 physically and emotionally
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 since they are aware of the fact that they want to live alone and would be happy.
Although
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also
 partially believe in staying with family or with your partner can make
people
 feel happy and that they can help each other when in need of the hour.
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