In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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In some
countries
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the average weight of
people
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is increasing and their levels of hell and fitness are
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creasing. In my
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the
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causes of these
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are the way they are eating and a lazy day art. The
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make
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people
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overweight is the way they are eating,
people
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who are overweight always enjoy eating junk food, unhealthy food and so on which is the problem make them overweight, had a high
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make the
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their muscles. Another hand, eating too much can
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make them faced with some house
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,
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is diabetes. The
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thing that
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people
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over Waze is their laziness, they are sitting in front of computers all
days
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at work, when they came back home they are still sitting on the couch to watch their
favorite
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football match. There are some reasons for health and fitness
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. To avoid these
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, we should have
a good daily routines
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a good daily routine
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,
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good daily routines include good habits like doing exercise in the morning, going to the gym, don't eat too
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unhealthy foods, so on. Keep
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routine, healthy and fitness
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we're not happened
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we do not happen
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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