Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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others think that
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factors are more essential for
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agree with
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country
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developed
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the conditions set aside for the
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by the state are very
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important
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incomes for
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,
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of the
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rich
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if you have enough money you tend
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for your wishes,
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and you can
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your health. From
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earlier
people
tend to earn more money,
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furthermore
,
people
who lived economical
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developer
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they spent
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that
the
money for they want. Nowadays we live in a modern world and
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facilities
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free anywhere. it means
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had a chance,
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would have lived in a
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could earn more.
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support
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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