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Schools not force children to learn a foreign language. to what extent do you agree with this statement

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Some people assume foreign
language
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 should not be a mandatory subject studied in
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. While I believe that it is useful for pupils to learn a foreign
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, I agree strongly that they should not be forced to do so. On the one hand, it will benefit the education of most children if they are encouraged to learn a foreign
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, with the modern trend of globalization, it’s more and more important for students knew about languages to ensure that they will have more opportunities to access the culture from all around the world.
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, studying
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 is one of the
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 to broaden our horizons,
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, sources of English academic contents are much more than other languages
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because English is an international
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 that’s why many scientists or
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 in other fields will tend to publish their researches in English to make sure that the rest of the world can be approached easier.
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, it would be counterproductive to forcedly oblige schoolchildren to learn
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. At
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, studying languages
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 not a piece of cake and required a lot of
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 as well as extra
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 in the learning process
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reason
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the reason
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 why some students will get bored when they are under the pressure, and the more forced
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 impel them, the more ineffective the results are. They must be stimulated by the enthusiasm teachers to encourage them. Another reason is that pupils will be reluctant to learn
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 if they cannot see why it’s relevant to their future lives.
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, individual Vietnamese pupils should not be
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 to study
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 if they are certain that it’s not a role for their careers In conclusion, I argue that
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 should encourage students to study
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 but not compel.
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