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A knowledge of maths is not important for most jobs nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#maths #jobs
Mathematics is an incredibly useful subject
that is
 learned by almost everyone on the planet to some degree. Is
maths
,
however
, a useful tool for most
jobs
, especially with the advent of modern technology? In my view, I would tend to agree that it is no longer a vital part of most
jobs
,
although
 it clearly remains critical for some industries. There is now a growing number of professions where
maths
 is no longer important on a day-to-day basis at
work
. Employees no longer need to perform calculations
such
 as adding up bills or calculating percentages
while
 at
work
. These
jobs
 are performed by technologies
such
 as tills and computers which automate the entire process. Once upon a time, retail employees would need to manually calculate the final sales total, but
this
 process has been replaced, first by calculators and more recently by electronic tills. Other companies, which would have once had to issue invoices or calculate future sales forecasts, no longer require employees to manually calculate these since they have a variety of computer programs to complete
this
work
. As we have a growing number of people working in these fields, it is safe
to conclude
 that an increasing proportion of the population does not require basic
maths
 to perform their duties. Despite
this
, it is important to note that there is, and will always be, a subsection of the population that will probably always be required to rely on their
maths
 skills. Health professionals,
such
 as doctors and dentists, very often have to calculate doses of medicines manually,
while
 researchers in various fields have to calculate statistics and probabilities of events.
Finally
, there are, of course, those people who
work
 in accounting, auditing or actuarial services who will always need mathematics. The increased prevalence of technology within workplaces has, in my view, led to
maths
 becoming less important for most
jobs
 nowadays. There will always remain,
however
, people in society who will rely on
this
 subject to perform their
jobs
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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