Today our lifestyle is changing rapidly and affects family relationships. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In
this
modern scenario,technology has brought many amenities to us in terms of electronic gadgets and advanced machines,
therefore
these facilities have altered harmonious
realtionships
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relationships
among
people
in either optimistic or pessimistic ways.
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better detail with my subject view. To embark on,nowadays,many individuals tend to operate phones rather than spending
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valuable time with their families,so it will
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some
demerits
in many ways.
firstly
,the most significant factor is
communication
can become weaker among
people
and sometimes it leads to loose permanent bonding due to some misunderstandings.
secondly
,these days,everyone has become indolent because of the modern facilities
such
as washing machines and vacuum cleaners.
for instance
,when I was young,there were no
such
amenities,
thus
people
were active as they used to work themselves like washing clothes with their hands
instead
of using machines and
this
is
also
one of the exercises to keep the health in a good condition. On another hand,
although
there are
demerits
to
this
trend,there are
also
benefits.
initially
,
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of technology enables many things can be easier in terms of simple transmission through
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mobile phones as well as it furnishes video call facility for all
people
who are residing far away from their families.
moreover
,we can
also
update with the latest news with using some apps on the phone like google and way2news.
for example
,In the past ,everyone used to read the newspaper for knowing the information about the outer world.
furthermore
,at that time there were no electronic gadgets,so
people
used to write letters to their families for
communication
purpose.not only latest style provides many opportunities but
also
facilitates
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communication
through
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mobiles. To conclude,every coin has both merits and
demerits
,but the pros are higher than the cons.the benefits in terms of easy
communication
and instant updates.whereas,
demerits
are
communication
limited as well as become idle.
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