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Some people say that universities should only accept the young students with the highest marks. However, others think that universities should accept people of all ages that may not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #universities #students #marks #ages #school
It is a common belief that most young
people
 go to
universities
 with their own high scores.
However
, there is a more persuasive argument that many
people
 who are getting old or receive low scores
also
 can enter
universities
.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
 who insist that only younger
people
, one of them with a perfect score, have to go to university.
This
 suggests is a prevalent silent promise of society and nowadays most
people
 do that because
universities
 are learning much higher study than high school so
people
 have to follow and understand the contents. If they do not they will be eliminated from their own name on the board.
Nevertheless
, the community should not set distinguish all
people
 because
people
 have a right to receive vary of educations and anyone can not disrupt
this
. If they do that, It is apparently discriminating. Getting a good score is able to judge
people
 who can get a qualification to enter
universities
 and it is generally used in many communities.
However
,
for example
, It can be an unfair method because anybody can not know the negative deal between teacher and student.
Moreover
, a nice result means not being a smart and good student so
people
 do not decide only their's score. Plus,
people
 who were poor when they are young could not grad the chance before, after growing up they want to go to
universities
. To sum up, while it is apparent that going to
universities
 is for only young
people
 but it is undeniable that entering to
universities
 for various
people
 has more positive effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competitive environment
  • fosters
  • meritocratic
  • inclusive
  • diverse perspectives
  • late bloomers
  • life challenges
  • permanently disadvantaged
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • emotional intelligence
  • crucial
  • proponents
  • motivates
  • establishing
  • well-qualified
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