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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays, we have witnessed significant developments in the agricultural field.
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, some
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 might argue that hungriness still is a huge problem in the world. Undoubtedly, the population has been increasing rapidly in recent decades and causes several adversities, especially for developing societies.
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 and foremost, governments can’t provide enough
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 for their
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’s demands even with technological advances in agriculture.
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, countries don’t have access to sufficient resources for agricultural usage.
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, due to the deficiency of farming land, authorities forced deforestation and logging which causes environmental disaster.
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, developing agricultural equipment is not effective to provide
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 for all the
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.
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, there are various ways to solve
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 problem.
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 of all, changing
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’s eating habits can reduce the number of livestock and save so much money and time
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, by substituting insects with conventional livestock, because, insects consist of a high proportion of vital nutrition and it more convenient to produce than red meat. The
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 solution is using genetically modified
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, obviously, society is not ready for consuming artificial goods;
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, we can introduce
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 new
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 to
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’s culinary gradually.
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, we must commence an approach to educate
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 to prevent wasting and raise awareness about hungriness in the world. In conclusion,
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, developments in agriculture is an absolute necessity;
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, it is not the only case, we have to change our diet by using alternative products and educating
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 about the hazards of indulgness and wasting
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 to reduce the hungriness of the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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