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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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Literacy plays a significant role in various aspects of
life
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 and the ever-rising rate of
illiteracy
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 has worried
educational
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 systems of many
countries
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. There seem to be two main causes and some effects that will be discussed in the following. Perhaps the main cause is the overwhelming cost of education that people who lived in less-affluent
countries
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, could not afford. In
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countries
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, due to poverty and the increasing rate of inflation, families can only provide their basic needs including food, clothes, and housing. Their economic condition makes the education of their children a low priority. The ever-present danger of decreased motivation for finishing
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education seems to be the
second
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 well-known cause of
illiteracy
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. Some children, particularly those who live in
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developed
countries
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, start
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school,
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, they lose their motivation to acquire advanced knowledge and
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 abandon study without obtaining an academic degree.
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 phenomenon could be due to the new advances in video games, social media, and internet-based applications, that have distracted children from homework. The effects of
illiteracy
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 can be sensed in all aspects of
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individual
life
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. An illiterate person cannot read, understand even simple signs, and find the correct directions that regularly happen in everyday
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.
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, these people constantly experience a feeling of weakness that influence their communication. An obvious impact of
illiteracy
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 would be unemployment or having low-paying jobs. In today’s modernized world, people should have at least a bachelor degree to be hired in order to avoid difficulties.
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, they tend to commit a crime like burgling that threaten the security of
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. The final but the most important effect of
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 would be its irreparable damage
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 the economic and political conditions of a country. Because both terms need a highly-educated nation to preserve and progress the country in accordance with other developed
countries
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. In conclusion, poverty and decreased motivation are the main causes of
illiteracy
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 that have negative impacts on the quality of
life
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 of an illiterate person, the number of skilled employees, the economy, and the security of a country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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