Being celebrities such as famous sports person or celebrities bring problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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cosmopolitan world, it seems that everyone wants to be famous in order to live a luxurious lifestyle.
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, despite the financial benefits, I still believe that the drawbacks of being famous outweigh the advantages. On the one hand, I concede that there are plentiful benefits to being famous.
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, superstars often get public recognition. They are easily identified by their fans.
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, they enjoy the luxuries of life
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as driving expensive cars and wearing trendy clothes.
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, Stars are
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fortunate enough to travel around the globe with their private plans.
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, Cristiano Ronaldo has two private plans one for his family and the
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for him.
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, despite the advantages, I still feel that there are more drawbacks to being famous.
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, famous personalities have a lack of privacy because they are under the constant lens of the paparazzi.
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, they do not enjoy ordinary things in life as simple as going out for a dinner with the family. Even worse, they are always under criticism for whatever they do or wear on their social media accounts.
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, many famous people
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receive hard comments from their fans and that may lead to depression, anxiety and suicide as well. to sum up, I believe that all people dream to live on fame and wealth.
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, the downsides of
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choice overweight the positive side.
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