Some people argue that keeping pets is beneficial for longevity while others believe that household animals are not healthy for people to have as companions. Discuss both sides of the argument and which side you support, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

While it is
thaught
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thought
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household animals have only positive sides
other
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others
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believe that they can be harmful
for
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to
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their health. I
convinced
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that
this
issue has both sides. There are a lot of
people
who takes care
pets
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of pets
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. These
people
strongly believe
to
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in
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positive
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the positive
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effects to them
from
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their
pets
.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, It was obvious that housekeeping animals could influence
to
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the medium mostly
exellent
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excellent
.
For example
, cats, which usually live in our houses,
service
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like a little
creature
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creatures
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that
bring
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to
house
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the house
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a
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calmness, when some of us feel stress.
Additionaly
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Additionally
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,
pets
could be like a little baby for
people
who decided to
born
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. By taking care of
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an animal
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animal
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animals
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they could
taught
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to
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simple
parent's
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parents'
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duties.
For instance
, my close relatives are going to get a baby but before getting pregnant they bought a little dog. They said that having a baby is a huge responsibility so they decided to start with
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the dog
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dog
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dogs
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to check out their abilities.
However
, meanwhile keeping in our house
pets
made us
to
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restrict our wishes.
For example
, If you want to go
abrod
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abroad
you
couldnt
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couldn't
leave your house for a long time.
Moreover
,
people
who have household animals have to provide them
everything
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with everything
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they need, including food, drugs,
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necessary
necessery
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a necessery
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place to sleep and so on.
Addiotionaly
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Additionally
, providing
pets
extremelly
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extremely
expensive pleasure for most
people
and it demands great abilities to have them.
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, I have my own cat with its all
demandings
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demanding
. It often
create
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a
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noise and havoc in my flat. To conclude who takes care
after
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of
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pets
has a huge responsibility to provide them
everything
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with everything
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.
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Decision related
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living with
pets
depends only person who really
want
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it.
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