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Some people think living in a country for a period of time is needed to learn the language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that spending some time in a region is required to gain
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 understanding of the
language
 and traditions. I completely disagree with the above statement as
this
 is not the only way to become proficient in any non-native
language
 as described below.
To begin
 with, it is not efficient to live in another nation for some people, due to financial costs. Living abroad is many people's dream, but the expense is considerably higher than living in your own country.
For example
, many students get study visas with permission to live abroad, but
this
 would cost roughly 10000 dollars for 1 year and it is not necessary that within
this
 cycle of time a person can acquire the desired skills in
language
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Secondly
, the lifestyle. It can be difficult for a person to
adapt
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 culture of a new state in terms of food, weather, religion. People will not get the appropriate environment to celebrate their own festivals and rituals.
For instance
, it is hard to get vegetarian food in non-veg countries. These situations may lead to homesickness and give up on learning new things.
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 on the internet. There are many tutorials available on the websites to learn foreign languages from the beginner to advanced level. In
this
 pandemic situation, online classes are really picking up and most of the education providers in the world offer e-learning which is affordable and convenient for everyone. To conclude, staying for a while in the country to gain the knowledge of
language
 and customs is not economical for everyone and I believe
this
 can be easily achieved with the help of the internet.
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