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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action.

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Some
people
 think that environmental
problems
 are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the
government
 cannot solve these environmental
problems
 unless individuals make some action. Nowadays, a lot of
people
 suppose that
environment
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environmental
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problems
 could not
be solve
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be solved
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 by
one
person
. Others think that the
government
 cannot solve
environment
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environmental
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problems
 without human help.
This
 essay agrees that
one
person
 cannot solve
huge
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a huge
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ecology
problem
, but he could make a big contribution to solving
this
problem
. On the
one
 hand,
one
person
 can make
higher
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a higher
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level
 of
ecology
 in place, where he is living.
Moreover
,
one
 human can make a team from
people
, who want to solve
environment
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environmental
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problems
 and make
ecology
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the ecology
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level
 better.
Besides
, man could ask for money from the
government
 or the nature protection fund to solve the environmental
problems
. In my opinion, it is impossible to solve
ecology
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the ecology
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problem
 at once, but everyone always can make
better
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the better
a better
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level
 of
ecology
 in
area
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the area
an area
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 in which he lives.
On the other hand
,
person
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a person
the person
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 cannot decide huge
environment
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environmental
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problem
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problems
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 at
ones
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once
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. Overall, it is impossible to solve huge
ecology
problem
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problems
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 at
ones
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once
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.
Moreover
, there are not many
people
 who have the opportunity to deal with
environment
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environmental
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problems
 most of
their
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the
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 time.
However
, everyone can inform the
government
 about an environmental
problem
 in your town or village. In my viewpoint,
people
 must inform the
government
 about
ecology
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ecological
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problems
. If
person
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a person
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 informs the
government
 about
environmental
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an environmental
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problem
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problems
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 in his area,
this
person
 helped
administration
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the administration
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 to solve
this
problem
. All in all, a
person
 cannot solve a global environmental
problem
 alone, but he can report it to the
government
.
In addition
, everyone can improve the
level
 of
ecology
 in their own area. 254
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