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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action.

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Some
people
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 think that environmental
problems
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 are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the
government
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 cannot solve these environmental
problems
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 unless individuals make some action. Nowadays, a lot of
people
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 suppose that
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environment
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problems
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 could not
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 by
one
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person
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. Others think that the
government
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 cannot solve
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environment
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problems
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 without human help.
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person
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 cannot solve
huge
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a huge
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ecology
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problem
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, but he could make a big contribution to solving
this
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problem
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. On the
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 hand,
one
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person
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 can make
higher
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a higher
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level
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 of
ecology
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 in place, where he is living.
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,
one
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 human can make a team from
people
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, who want to solve
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environment
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problems
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 and make
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ecology
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the ecology
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level
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 better.
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, man could ask for money from the
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 or the nature protection fund to solve the environmental
problems
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. In my opinion, it is impossible to solve
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ecology
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the ecology
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problem
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 at once, but everyone always can make
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the better
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level
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 of
ecology
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the area
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 in which he lives.
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,
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person
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a person
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 cannot decide huge
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environment
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problem
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 at
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once
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. Overall, it is impossible to solve huge
ecology
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problem
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problems
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 at
ones
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once
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.
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, there are not many
people
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 who have the opportunity to deal with
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environment
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problems
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 most of
their
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 time.
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, everyone can inform the
government
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 about an environmental
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 in your town or village. In my viewpoint,
people
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 must inform the
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 about
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ecology
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problems
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. If
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person
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a person
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 informs the
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 about
environmental
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an environmental
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problem
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 in his area,
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person
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 helped
administration
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the administration
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 to solve
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problem
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. All in all, a
person
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 cannot solve a global environmental
problem
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 alone, but he can report it to the
government
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.
In addition
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, everyone can improve the
level
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 of
ecology
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 in their own area. 254
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