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Nuclear technology not only offers a lot of advantages but also threatens the world with its danger. The use of this technology should be discouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nuclear technology changed the definition of power. Back in time power was calculated by the economics of the country, Now, it depends on the physical force of the nation. People state "Nuclear technology not only offers a lot of advantages but
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 threatens the world with its danger. The use of
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 technology should be discouraged", I partially disagree with
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 statement.
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 it is important to understand why nuclear devices are more protective than threatening. Before serval decades, peace was not a common surrounding because of various reasons,
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, countries always aimed to colonies other states, trades were unfair between people, and there was no sense of democracy. Over the period when modernization emerged, harmful weapons played a crucial role to create and maintaining peace. The fear of the damage they could cause kept many enemies within their limits.
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, It was not that only good things happened, many trouble-causing incidents took place.
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 as the horrifying moment when bombs were dropped on Hiroshima and Nagasaki,
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 act of war took millions of lives and left nothing but grief behind. Much more
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 cruel act was done, which was enough to ban the use of these dangerous weapons.
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, countries promoted the development sector of nuclear machines. Somehow these steps which at the moment seemed to be dangerous is why we are safe and democratic today. The terror that these weapons can cause is extremely devastating,
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 fear created the peace world needed. To conclude, I think it is completely acceptable to develop nuclear machinery until it is used for defence, even more, there are laws that restrict all nuclear-powered territories from using these machines without permission.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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