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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always good. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #lives #change
There is a steady increase in the number of grave crimes committed annually. Many claims that the most effective method of a deterrent is
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death
 penalty ,
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 some people think that there are other necessary measurements, which are considered to be taken. On the one hand, it is commonly believed that it is easier for most lawbreakers to accept
death
 as a punishment than to be condemned to imprisonment.
In other words
, a criminal will be murdered, which is quite a quick process ,
moreover
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 the culprit gets rid of agony and is free, whereas either being highly taxed or being a social outcast is more gravy according to some.
This
 is exemplified by new techno-bracelets in China, which aims to control violations and create a friendly environment. Those bracelets will count all your offences and in case of having more than three or five occasions you will be taxed or banished, what is more statistics are available for all citizens of city and country generally.
As a result
, not only will people get used to the discipline but
also
 will be more responsible for their own behaviour. (?)
On the other hand
, knowing that the
death
 cost is your future if you break a serious law, could prevent crime and throw the balance in favour of a socially safe environment. For many positions, there are lots of occasions, when ex-prisoners act violently again and,
therefore
, escape jail by paying fees. While the
death
 penalty won’t let it happen a
second
 time. In conclusion, it could be argued that the
death
 penalty is the right way to prevent the increasing number of crimes,
however
, there are other options
such
 as taxes or expulsion, which are convenient too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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