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Some people think that the environment may be destroyed because of tourism. Others, however, believe that it is a way to preserve nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #environment #tourism #nature
Nowadays, many nations are establishing
tourism
 as their one
of
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priority development.
Although
, a number of individuals believe
tourism
 might reduce the environmental aspects while some
other
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others
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 realise
tourists
 will stimulate the nature preservations. The purpose of
this
 essay is to discuss both sides and I will give my own opinion about
tourism
's impact
to
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environment
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the environment
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. On the one hand,
tourism
 development will lead to an undesirable impact on the
environment
.
For example
, some
tourists
 who care less about the
environment
 tend to dispose of their waste in many places and do vandalism in attractive places as well.
As a result
, an enormous amount of garbage becomes a notorious issue to
native
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environment
.
In addition
, local society will be damaged as impacts from these activities
such
 as household waste issues or damaged infrastructures in several areas.
On the other hand
, others strongly agree with the idea that
tourism
 is a form of
environment
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 preservation and overseas travellers could bring many benefits to the
environment
.
For instance
, all travellers will spend their money on accommodations.
Hence
, it might elevate local economies
in particular
 areas.
Secondly
, the funding from
tourists
 will enable
for
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environmental protections and establishing organisations
which
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 lead the environmental preservations. In conclusion, it is my opinion that
tourists
 provide many benefits to the
environment
 and native people as well.
However
, several regulations should be implemented in order to mitigate the undesirable effect on the
environment
 itself or local communities as well
such
 as waste disposal,
tourists
 tax laws and so on.
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