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Some people think that the environment may be destroyed because of tourism. Others, however, believe that it is a way to preserve nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many nations are establishing
tourism
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 as their one
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priority development.
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, a number of individuals believe
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 might reduce the environmental aspects while some
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 realise
tourists
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 will stimulate the nature preservations. The purpose of
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 essay is to discuss both sides and I will give my own opinion about
tourism
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's impact
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environment
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the environment
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. On the one hand,
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 development will lead to an undesirable impact on the
environment
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.
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, some
tourists
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 who care less about the
environment
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 tend to dispose of their waste in many places and do vandalism in attractive places as well.
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, an enormous amount of garbage becomes a notorious issue to
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environment
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.
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, local society will be damaged as impacts from these activities
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 as household waste issues or damaged infrastructures in several areas.
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, others strongly agree with the idea that
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 is a form of
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environment
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 preservation and overseas travellers could bring many benefits to the
environment
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.
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, all travellers will spend their money on accommodations.
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, it might elevate local economies
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 areas.
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, the funding from
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 will enable
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environmental protections and establishing organisations
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 lead the environmental preservations. In conclusion, it is my opinion that
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 provide many benefits to the
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 and native people as well.
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, several regulations should be implemented in order to mitigate the undesirable effect on the
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 itself or local communities as well
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 as waste disposal,
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 tax laws and so on.
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