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Globalization is creating a world of one culture and destroying national identity. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#globalization #world #culture #identity
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I agree with the concept that
globalization
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 is affecting the national
identity
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 of several
cultures
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,
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, I argue that
this
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 effect has positive impacts on creating
world
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a world
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 of one culture.
Globalization
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 can be denoted as how the interaction and integration among people with a different
background
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is
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 changing their thoughts and
believes
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.
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, it can be defined as a process nascent from creating
global
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a global
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 economy, having common policies, and exchanging research and education experience between
countries
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.
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globalization
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 is not a new term to our
word
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world
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 and it has been a
center
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 of research centuries ago, it has been accelerated recently due to the high technology and the development of
internet
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the internet
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.
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on
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 the other hand, is a heritage of manners, values, knowledge,
believes
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beliefs
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 and norms
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that has
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has
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 been transferred from
generation
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one generation
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 to another. Most of
thes
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these
the
cultures
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 kept known only by its’ people who are living under its’ tradition.
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,
globalization
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 was a reason to
interduce
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introduce
unknow
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cultures
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 to the world, and
as a
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result
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 there some foreign norms were adopted from different
cultures
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.
Globalization
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 is a motivation for stopping the pattern in transferring
cultures
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 between generations,
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instead
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 it is a reason in enhancing the current ones and
develop
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it
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them
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 to fit the
believes
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 of the new generations. To
this
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 end, from my point of a view, national
identity
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 is not something unique to a specific country that we must save
it
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by fighting
the
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globalization
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. There are groups of
countries
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share
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that share
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 almost the same
identity
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 proving that national
identity
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 is not
peculiar
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particularly
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 related to one country.
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, the Gulf Cooperation Council
countries
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, or as it called the GCC
countries
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. The six
countries
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 are
neighbors
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, sharing
same
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the same
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 culture with
slightly
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 differences, it will be hard for any outsider (not local) to differentiate between them.
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