Globalization is creating a world of one culture and destroying national identity. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

I agree with the concept that
globalization
is affecting the national
identity
of several
cultures
,
however
, I argue that
this
effect has positive impacts on creating
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a world
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of one culture.
Globalization
can be denoted as how the interaction and integration among people with a different
background
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is
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changing their thoughts and
believes
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.
Moreover
, it can be defined as a process nascent from creating
global
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economy, having common policies, and exchanging research and education experience between
countries
.
Although
globalization
is not a new term to our
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and it has been a
center
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of research centuries ago, it has been accelerated recently due to the high technology and the development of
internet
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.
Cultures
on
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the other hand, is a heritage of manners, values, knowledge,
believes
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and norms
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that has
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has
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been transferred from
generation
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one generation
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to another. Most of
thes
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these
the
cultures
kept known only by its’ people who are living under its’ tradition.
However
,
globalization
was a reason to
interduce
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introduce
unknow
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cultures
to the world, and
as a
result
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there some foreign norms were adopted from different
cultures
.
Globalization
is a motivation for stopping the pattern in transferring
cultures
between generations,
instead
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it is a reason in enhancing the current ones and
develop
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it
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to fit the
believes
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of the new generations. To
this
end, from my point of a view, national
identity
is not something unique to a specific country that we must save
it
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by fighting
the
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globalization
. There are groups of
countries
share
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almost the same
identity
proving that national
identity
is not
peculiar
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related to one country.
For example
, the Gulf Cooperation Council
countries
, or as it called the GCC
countries
. The six
countries
are
neighbors
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, sharing
same
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culture with
slightly
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differences, it will be hard for any outsider (not local) to differentiate between them.
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