What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays youngsters from well wages families, are more interested in

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the screens, either playing computer games and social media or watching TV

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in our society, most people

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induced since very young ages, to use gadgets

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as computers, iPods and phones when they should learn to develop physical skills.I believe

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fast food and make them gain weight, at the same time, that make them

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have less discipline get used to having whatever they want, whenever they want, so they become relaxed and less active.

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to these, children become addicted to computer games, which make them less social because they refuse the interaction with others,due to their main interest is to be in their own space their activities by themselves. On the other ,hand some people believe that computers games help children to develop computer skills while improving problem resolution responses and IT knowledge. To sum up, I can say that it is essential for children to develop motor skills to build a healthy lifestyle.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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sedentary lifestyle
leisure activities
digital technology
urban living
academic pressure
distractions
tech-savvy
exercise-oriented apps
fitness and health awareness
gym workouts
cycling
yoga
inactive lifestyles
generational differences

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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times. They don’t want their children to read any entertainment books because they think it is were of time. Do you agree or disagree?