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In some cultures, the old age is more valued, while in some cultures the youth is more valued. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#cultures #age #youth
As it is commonly believed older
people
 have more influence in society whereas at other cultures
this
 role is given for youngsters. Despite
of
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the fact that young
people
 are our future for whom there must be some special
execuses
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excuses
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, I personally believe that old
people
 are those for whom we need to show respect. The following essay will examine both points. Recently, it was identified that teenagers tend to be more valued than
older
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 part of society.
However
,
this
 statement is not true for every culture. As an
illustration
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 we can analyze Japanese culture where older
people
 are highly respected for what they have done in the past and
for giving
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wise
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 approach
for
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young
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the young
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 generation. All the words that were spoken by
eldest
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 member of
family
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 is a law, which is explained by the colossal package of experience.
On the other hand
,
young
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 part of humanity is different cultures has constantly been
a
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hope for our future. As a rule, in the imagination of
young
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a young
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person
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 there can be distinct uncommon ideas
which
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assists
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 humanity in development.
For instance
, in
the
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science fiction
films
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 we were hearing
a lines
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a line
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 that were referred to
sabving
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saving
having
 a baby or
teenagers
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teenager
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.
This
 would have been done for the sake of
future
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a future
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 where young individuals could adapt and evolve. To sum it up, in my
opinion
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 it is preferable to value older
people
 more than younger
people
,
besites
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besides
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, we have to be grateful for what they have done in the past so that we could live in peaceful conditions. In the
next
decades
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this
 statement will probably alter as with the growth of culture morale,
mindset
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the mindset
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 of
people
 will be changed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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