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Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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With the development of
technology
,
people
 have more ways of communication ,
such
 as telephones, social media... It is true
that is
 the positive development and
also
 which affected
people
 contact
friends
, doing work easily. The most popular way has
technology
 affected is that
people
 have more chances to make new
friends
.
For example
, nowadays many
people
 like
play
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the
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games online. So
them
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though
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through
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 the games realized many
people
 from different places.
This
 increases the chances of making some
friends
have
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who have
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 the same interests and ideas
with
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 yourself. The other way has
technology
 affected is that
people
 could contact
friends
 and families convenient.
People
 don’t need to write
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letter
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 or call them inconveniently like 20 years ago. We have many apps
could
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 know their recent life,
such
 as what’s app,
instagram
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. When we
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 them,
also
 can call them
have
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 the video. We don’t
need
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 worry about distance anymore. Including, if there are very important things that need to be understood
face
 to
face
, video call is a good choice to clearly understand the situation at that time.
Although
 the benefits of new
interact
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 of
technology
 are so many. It
also
 has some drawbacks that one of
it
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which
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 is
make
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making
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people
 uncomfortable
chat
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 with others with offline communication. Because
people
 rely on online social networking, they reduce
face
 to
face
 communication with others in real life. So they don't know how to communicate with
people
 offline.
This
 is
also
 a problem in today's society.
People
 often speak on social media, but in
reality
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 they dare not talk to others.
However
, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. In the process of development, some problems can not be avoided.
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  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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