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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books in light of the fact that they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books in light of the
fact
 that they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. In my essay, I discuss
this
 point and its negatives and positives in the paragraphs below.
Firstly
, in my
opinion
, none will buy impression papers in the prospect,
this
 idea is the extremely true
opinion
, owning to the
fact
 that, read the printed journals rather than online read is better,
therefore
, personally, I do not believe
noone
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no one
no-one
 will buy impression newspapers in the future.
For instance
, if people will buy printed pagodas want online without paying,
this
 position is
harm
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 for
publucs
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public
publics
, due to the
fact
, folks will read impression papers
in
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 a telephone or computer, and
this
 state is damage to
humans's
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 eyes in
first
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 stead, in light of the
fact
 that
,
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 mobile phones or
computers's
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erdes
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orders
rides
 are an immensely erode to eyes and brain parts.
Secondly
, in my experience, nobody will buy illustrators in the immediate future,
this
 point is not
also
 true, in light of the
fact
 that
,
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 electronic books
are not replace
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 of simple illustrators. Simple books read is supremely interesting and useful, owning to the
fact
, they are ordinarily safe,
thus
, I prefer everyone will buy printed journals or illustrators rather than able to read everything they want online without paying in the futurity. In conclusion, in my
opinion
, personally, I believe
this
 is
a
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 extremely incorrect idea,
therefore
, I disagree upper with
opinion
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.
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