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Some people think that watching sport is waste of leisure time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Sport plays an important role in entertainment, which can provide joy and happiness to audiences,
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, all sports gain popularity and are being watched by a billion people across the world, especially
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 matches.
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, others including me believe that watching prolonged
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 matches is a waste of valuable
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, and it is formidable for humans' health. In
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 essay, the drawbacks of watching sport will be discussed in detail. The
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 reason to make me agree with the latter viewpoint is prolonged duration for each match, As each
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 match takes at least 2 hours per game, which we can spend
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 amount of
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 doing other useful activities
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 as reading books, writing English essay, and exercising.
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,
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 of watching
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 for 2 hours, we can spend
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 leisure moment reading academic published papers to gain novel knowledge.
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, spending sleeping on enjoying
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 events can be disastrous for health. Because most soccer matches are always broadcasted at night times, the audiences who're addicted to the games do not have enough
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 to sleep.
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, The World cup, the biggest soccer competition in the world, lives on TV around 2 or 3 am in Bangkok
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.
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, the Thai audiences have deficient
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 to sleep resulting in being exhausted the
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 day, and cannot do work properly. In conclusion,
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 many people consider spending
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 watching sports is leisure
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 to relax , I'm the one who does not agree with the former viewpoint as it consumes a lot of
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 and lead to less efficacy for working due to lack of sleep.
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