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The governments should expend more money on medical researching and fewer researching the environment.

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The
governments
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 should expend more money on medical
research
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 and less researching the
environment
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. I disagree with the upper idea.
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, I think
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 idea is not appropriate, due to the fact, if the climate is clean, the demand for medical will decrease. So, I think the administration should spend more money on investigating the
environment
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.
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, if the ascendancy drones broke to
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 the
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, explorers might find a plethora of minerals.
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 atmosphere will bring profit to the administration. If the climate is very dirty, folks will stumble to a number of illnesses. For
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 reason, there are numerous ways to keep the
environment
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 pure and fresh.
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, the
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 method is to put garbage trucks on every street or every district. The
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 method is to create a special trash limited region and its do control. Of course, with the help of ascendancy investment.
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, the
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 should
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 lose mamon on medical exploration. I think if medical boffin is conduct
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, to lots of illness might define a cure. Later, in-country the country a lot of humans will get rid of their diseases. All
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, of course, requires investment from
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.
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, by the administration expend more flake on the medical investigative is great owning to the fact that medicine should
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 rapid development.
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, by ,
governments
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 cash
research
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 the
environment
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 is very fine in light of the fact that where there is cleanliness, there is always life and cleanliness is always important. In conclusion, the medical investigator and
research
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 climate require ascendancy exchequer. I think the
governments
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 should embezzle more currency on
research
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 the
environment
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