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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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It is considered by some
people
 that they prefer to attempt various and new
things
such
 as going to new places and eating dissimilar types of food while others like doing what they have always done.
To begin
 with, there are some
people
 who still
continuing
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 to choose the same places and meals. Not challenging themselves and remaining constantly is more convenient for their lifestyle. I opine the reason is being disappointed.
For instance
, if
people
 go for having
a
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dinner
to
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 a new restaurant, but he finds the food is not delicious, they feel their money is wasted or their evening is ruined.
At
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this
 situation , they may contemplate that going to permanent places for eating is a better choice than the new ones.They always hesitate when they think about visiting somewhere new and it leads to the avoidance of new
things
, new opportunities.
However
, it is approved by some
people
 that
this
 kind of situation can not prevent them from trying new
things
 to make living is
an
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interesting.
People
 who do not afraid
experiencing
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 new
things
 have a positive outlook for
the
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life. New
things
 always relax
person
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 from stress. Some
people
 have
an
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 enthusiasm to attempt new possibilities which prove to be beneficial. To illustrate
this
, if
person
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 travel to other countries, he will have knowledge about that area or tasting new kinds of food from all over the world makes getting to know other cultures To conclude,
although
 living the same without changes is more convenient for some
people
, I am of the opinion that
people
 try to go out of from their permanent place for having more experiences
,
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 because
this
 attitude is more positive about life.
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