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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, it becomes a controversial topic regarding
abortion
 increasing rapidly. They said to some people that
abortion
 is supposed to be legal while others are against it. Young ages nowadays are getting pregnant, and they are not yet ready for any commitments and obligations. They are still at the age of curiosity that`s why they are exploring something without thinking, and because no one guiding them.
Abortion
 is better to them than to continue the pregnancy without any knowledge, to how to make their baby taken care of. Suppose to be
abortion
 should be legal as long as they detected earlier snd still no heart bit of the
fetus
. and Both parties are willing to remove or abort the
fetus
. In
this
 ,part it can help the young ladies to continue studying and to achieved someday what she wants to be. In our country Philippines
abortion
 is illegal.Because they said
this
 is the blessing that comes from above, but some families have not accepted
this
 situation because they will think that their names will have a bad reputation to the other families, that`s why some of the young pregnant ladies or unplanned pregnancies are going to the abortionist even it`s illegal, just to protect their names and families ,
However
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 some of them continued their pregnancy but after ,birt they just leave in the road or worst in the garbage. In conclusion, the government should study will what the good action regarding the rapidly increasing in
abortion
. They should allow
abortion
 in an earlier pregnancy ,especially if still no heart bit and if they detected that the
fetus
 has congenital defects and not more than that, but the
abortion
 will be illegal if the
fetus
 has a heart bit already.
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