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Many people leave their home country to study abroad nowadays. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, it is common for many people to travel to answer
country
 to continue their studies.
This
 essay will explore some of the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 recent trend. Studying overseas has a number of advantages.
Firstly
, it may give students access to knowledge and facilities
such
 as laboratories and libraries which are not available in their home
country
.
Furthermore
, by looking abroad students may find a wider range of courses than those offered in their
country
’s universities, and
therefore
 one which fits more closely to their particular requirements.
For example
, my brother moved to the United States
last
 year to study for a specialized law degree which was only available in that
country
.
However
, studying in another
country
 can present some difficulties.
To begin
, international study is extremely expensive,
In addition
 to the high tuition costs, the international student has additional expenses,
such
 as accommodation, transport and reading material.
Also
, being in a foreign
country
 can lead to a sense of isolation and being away from loved ones can be mentally difficult.
This
 can result in a student wishing to return to their home
country
 before they complete their studies.
For example
, a few of my friends recently returned from the UK as they were not happy living there.
As a result
, they did not complete their studies despite having paid a large amount in student tuition fees. In conclusion, studying abroad has both benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, it gives opportunities for people to advance their skills and perhaps their future careers.
However
, it can be expensive and emotionally draining. In my view, I believe studying abroad is worthwhile and that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear introduction with a thesis statement to outline the essay structure, followed by a logical arrangement of body paragraphs each with a central idea. Conclude with a summary that restates your position.
task achievement
Address the task fully by providing a balanced discussion of both advantages and disadvantages, supported by relevant examples. Make sure to cover all aspects of the prompt and present your viewpoint clearly throughout the essay.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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