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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In Human life, an individual has the
quidity
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quality
liquidity
 of being alone and due to the advent of technology, most people
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preferred
prefers
 to socialize online rather
seeing
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than seeing
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 a person physically.
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I believed that
this
 is a positive development. My explanation will be followed
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 the ensuing paragraphs. On the one hand, persons might save substantial monetary
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 due to the fact that they will speak to their
acquintances
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acquaintances
 through
internet
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the internet
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, in a way that they could have the opportunity in chit-chatting and cracks some jokes; virtual
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celebration
 is an exemplar to
this
, they could have a successful event thru zoom application,
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 they will not be contracted with
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.
In addition
, they will not put themselves in trouble with
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 to health issues.
On the other hand
, our countryfolks will be inclined with the usage of updated technology,
for instance
 utilizing computers and mobile phone in interacting to the colleagues; apart from that they will have a profound knowledge with different social platforms that they could maximize the usage.
As a result
, they became tech
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savvy
 and will
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definitely
 belong to the society wherein
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 of people are having a whale of a time in
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 of new technology.
Moreover
, youngsters will be
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 and
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 because they will stay at home and have
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 total connection with
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their
 classmates while using social platforms like
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 messenger to conduct a study group. Inasmuch as, they will be under the maximum tutelage of their parents, due to
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the
 fact that they are
physcially
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physically
 present at home most of the time. And parents will be more delighted because
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they
 have ample bonding time with their children. In summary,
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developmet
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development
 of socializing online has a great impact
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 all human
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beings
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 since they could be more productive, more safe and
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, and they will save more money while staying at home.
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