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Schools are no longer nescessary because children can get so much information available through the internet, and they can study just well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The human race for improvement changes everything around it in every short interval of time. Schools are
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 not untouched by these improvements. Nowadays, people suggest
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 study through the
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 of going to primitive schools.
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 it is a great transformation
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, I personally disagree with it due to some prudent reasons.
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 discuss some
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 post some points that will be presented to disagree with them. On the one hand, the
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 provides information at the same cost to the rich and poor.
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, according to the inflation data on
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 shows that it's always doubled than the general inflation for the
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 ten years. Rich can only afford quality
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 whereas poor are deprived of gaining knowledge, with
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 everyone can access knowledge at the same level.
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education
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 keeps kids indoor and keeps them safe from any kind of mishappenings.
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 the Oxford university survey on kidnapping while pandemic shows that 80% less crime took place in
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 period.
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, for a better world with equality
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education
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 should be promoted which brings safety for
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 and mental peace for parents.
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, schools build a foundation for the
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 generation by inculcating discipline and moral values since childhood. To illustrate, various government schemes and efforts are burned to keep students in classes because they are well aware students of today will be citizens of tomorrow who will cast their vote to make or break the government.
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,
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 meet each other physically to build interpersonal skills in themselves.
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, with a huge number of
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 at the same age in one place helps kids to understand the difference and create acceptance among them.
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 helps one to interact with each other and learn how to communicate with different people, due to hierarchy in school students learn the respect and discipline they should show to elders. To conclude, getting knowledge through the
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 seems to be an attractive
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 but the advantage attached to school
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 weigh more.
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 many people are in support of making the
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 the means of
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 but in my opinion schooling is a must for
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.
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