Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Regardless of many benefits, some people claim that the internet
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many threats to society. I strongly agree with
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opinion because it invades our privacy and
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people to harmful
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.
Firstly
, there is no insurance for online privacy. Your personal
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are constantly being leaked by
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platform to
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and exposed to
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with ill-intention.
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as a result
,
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rate growth rapidly.
For example
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research shows that: in 2018, Nearly 6 million Americans have been affected by online identity theft.
Secondly
, with a huge flow of information, it’s very difficult to censor digital
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. So bad creators can freely spread harmful data which lead to
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argument, cyberbullying and sometimes, endanger the
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of its users.
For instance
, In order to get more click rates and benefits, many “adult” websites advocate
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of women. Because of that, they
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to
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trade and even slavery. In conclusion, the cons of cyberspace outweigh the pro.
However
, the internet is still an essential part of our life because of the convenience it brings to life.
Therefore
, in order to protect
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, we should be cautious while surfing the net.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
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  • Logistics
  • User interface
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