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In some areas of the US, a «curfew» is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

#areas #«curfew» #teenagers #doors #time #night #adult
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The chart illustrates how a bee grows from being
eggs
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 to adulthood. Overall, for the insect to be fully matured, it goes through 5 different stages which complete its life cycle.
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, the life of a bee begins with 1 or 2
eggs
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 which are laid by the female every three
days
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.
Secondly
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, the
eggs
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 are hatched between 9 and 10
days
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. At 5
days
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, the young bee comes out of the egg and starts growing.
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, between 7 and 9
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, they start learning how to fly, and at
this
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 time they grow 3 times than before.
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, they become young adults with big
stripped
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striped
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 backs and get ready to lay
eggs
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 and continue the cycle. It should be noted that the life cycle of
this
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 insect is short, it is between 34 and 36
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. When they are mature, they are about 5 times huge compared to the
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 5
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 after hatching.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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